Community group poem

Could I possibly enjoin the comminty here to add a line to the line listed below to create a community poem? I think it would be very interesting! Just cut and paste the lines above and add your line to it. See how long it can go and where? Trying of course to keep it somewhat sensible.


Flags waved high in raucous applause

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Okay how about this....

The light danced lithely through the trees

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from underneath the people drag their feet

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I'm thinking.

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Tired from war across the seas

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The wind blasts; droplets fall; men die.

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While we are left to question, why?

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…then softly
I lay my hand
upon your fading heart,

and cry, for your soul
appears before me

as it ascends into the sky.

Last edited by dahlusion 05-07-2009 at 01:45:11 PM

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The crowds shout out,
Without a doubt,
This war has got to end!!!

Last edited by Gman9259 05-07-2009 at 04:29:41 PM

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So...um...it looks like we are left with....


Flags waved high in raucous applause
The light danced lithely through the trees
from underneath the people drag their feet
Tired from war across the seas
The wind blasts; droplets fall; men die.
While we are left to question, why?

…then softly
I lay my hand
upon your fading heart,

and cry, for your soul
appears before me

as it ascends into the sky.

The crowds shout out,
Without a doubt,
This war has got to end!!!


Anyone want to start a new one? maybe second times a charm.

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Try this one-----

Who will forgive me my transgressions
now that my love has gone
For she was my confessor

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confessing my sins from yesterday,
and now my forgiver is gone,
no more forgiving the things i've done wrong.
Now, held responcible for the brokeness of her heart,
the one that I claim to love and torn apart.

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Last edited by cousinsoren 05-16-2009 at 02:34:11 PM

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LET"S HAVE A GO ON THIS ONE AS COMMUNITY VENTURE. JUST ADD A LINE OR A STANZA.

RIVER MAMA

Where yu t'ink yu goin' . River Mama,

Wit' dem big boats 'pon yu breas' ?

Last edited by cousinsoren 05-16-2009 at 03:08:31 PM

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RIVER MAMA

Where yu t'ink yu goin' . River Mama,

Wit' dem big boats 'pon yu breas' ?

yu acts like yu holds got silver or gold

in thase secret hidden chests

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Here is this one so far....

(slimgrady's sonnet)

Who will forgive me my transgressions
now that my love has gone
For she was my confessor
confessing my sins from yesterday,
and now my forgiver is gone,
no more forgiving the things i've done wrong.
Now, held responcible for the brokeness of her heart,
the one that I claim to love and torn apart.
I would today was yesterday
To redeem the love I betray';
For then I would wander never again
But like a golden pendant on her breast.
I'd linger closely by her side
To hold her forever what ere betide.

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[quote="lightcourier"]RIVER MAMA

Where yu t'ink yu goin' . River Mama,

Wit' dem big boats 'pon yu breas' ?

yu acts like yu holds got silver or gold

in thase secret hidden chests[/quote]

Yu curve an' crawl, yu jump an' bawl,
Where yu t'ink yu goin' . River Mama?


WE ARE GOING GOOD UP TO NOW. LET'S GET ON WITH IT-LOL.

Last edited by cousinsoren 05-16-2009 at 07:14:21 PM

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Hey Courier and Phonix,

We are getting there, But I am curious to know what is your concept of River Mama.

Is she a bawdy , big-bodied woman who lives by a river or on a boat or is she a river or is she a river sprite, or an olden days American steamboat? -- LOL


What do you think?

Last edited by cousinsoren 05-17-2009 at 06:08:08 AM

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Last edited by cousinsoren 05-17-2009 at 06:36:22 AM