Picture Poetry anyone?
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by RPT40 The Line Every morning I wake It sits quietly I see it staring back It awaits It requires my strength My weakness, my rage, my fears my serenity, my skills, my failures my hopes, my dreams, and my life It takes only what it offers it's relentless in it's hunger and never accepts defeat or gives a second chance It is my failure, it is my goal It is a line waiting to be crossed There's a storm coming, time to prepare. Last edited by RPT40 10-22-2010 at 04:13:07 PM |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Your piece is full of LIFE: of all that is in life is in this challenge of an ascent. I see you covered the aspects from the innermost to the outer limits--- only one thing if changed would bring closer to perfection: the entire poem is in a subjective perspective then jumps to objective in last line; possibley 'I' should still be the voice. |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by RPT40 I’ve gone just about as far as I can I need you to take me higher If I were to say I could do it alone You’d be right to call me a liar Come with me to the top of the world Together we can go all the way We are not meant to live alone No, not another day When we reach the summit We will stand for all to see That I was put on this Earth for you And you, put here for me |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by Marsink Your piece is full of LIFE: of all that is in life is in this challenge of an ascent. I see you covered the aspects from the innermost to the outer limits--- only one thing if changed would bring closer to perfection: the entire poem is in a subjective perspective then jumps to objective in last line; possibley 'I' should still be the voice.  Very good suggestion, and good eye as well. I changed it, what do ya think? |
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RE: RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by Londo Originally Posted by RPT40 I’ve gone just about as far as I can I need you to take me higher If I were to say I could do it alone You’d be right to call me a liar Come with me to the top of the world Together we can go all the way We are not meant to live alone No, not another day When we reach the summit We will stand for all to see That I was put on this Earth for you And you, put here for me One word - Fantastic!! Last edited by RPT40 10-22-2010 at 04:18:54 PM |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by ApaqRasgirl This is a picture of a rock formation near a lake in Burma . The photo can only be taken on a specific day once a year when the sun rays touch the rocks at a certain angle. Beauty seeks thine UN-captive soul A soul that exists in realms darkness Gracious beauty leaves them with blindness Sees only the rocks A gift darkness blocks Keep ones soul UN-captive by darkness Life's beauty shall reward grateful eyes Pity those blindfolded by dark minds Dark holds beauty captive Eyes unreceptive Once a year nature kindly reminds Spirits that seek out life's elegance Natures gift be thine eyes rich wages The rocky shore line, Beyond, into time The reflection of man's temperance A soul existing in darks coven Peace and joy sensations left craving Natures miracle Indescribable Such are rare joys in natures haven A beauty seen only once a year Souls of love finds natures gift un-smeared Spirit, soul of light Natures gift of sight The chosen soul finds beauty so clear Let peace and joy surround your spirit Let not darkness leave you such demerit A rocky shoreline A gift to define Natures miracles living spirit Truly amazing picture!! And such an inspirational write!! |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone? RE Baby ToesA Child Is Born Last edited by julieannetx 10-25-2010 at 06:35:21 PM |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Wow Julie, niely done!! |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Dive Confined to the surface of laws and rules, conforming to the ways of patterns and schools, am I destined for greatness or being led by fools? I search for reality in the core of illusion, I shuffle through the masses fighting fear and confusion, no room to move I yearn for seclusion. The limits of gravity I willingly defy, hoping for a glimpse of creations eye, I conquer my fear and dive into the sky. Last edited by RPT40 11-09-2010 at 04:51:48 PM |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by RPT40 Why I have come to you this day, Lord To simply ask you, “Why?” Why have you taken the one I love And left me here to cry? Why did you not take me On that fateful day When the two of us went walking Out by the old highway? That car came off the shoulder And passed me on the right Then took my lovely Melinda Away from me that night Now I’m left here all alone To sit and grieve and sigh So once again I ask you, Lord This simple question, “Why?” - Londo 
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by RPT40 Eternal Embrace I remember the day you told me you loved me I remember how it changed me the way I felt about life about myself That day I lost every dream I ever had lost them all to the hope of a new dream One that could reach beyond touch and last forever |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by RPT40 Laying here beside you Locked in your embrace I could lie here forever Staring at your face When I’m in your arms Holding you so tight I know this is where I’m meant to be Through every day and night Our love shall last forever Tho’ time shall pass us by Perhaps someday someone will find This place where we did die. - Londo |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?We always were so worried |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by julieannetx We always were so worried About which one of us passed first Neither wanting to be alone Knowing last would be the worst For some uncanny reason God saved us from that strife He let us die as meant to be As husband with his wife Lying in each others' arms Neither one of us distraught We faced our death together “Thank You” our last thought I really dug this. |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by julieannetx We always were so worried About which one of us passed first Neither wanting to be alone Knowing last would be the worst For some uncanny reason God saved us from that strife He let us die as meant to be As husband with his wife Lying in each others' arms Neither one of us distraught We faced our death together “Thank You” our last thought Julie this is very good!! |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by RPT40 The Vision Looking out at creation all I can do is sigh, I am humbled, in awe mesmerized by the vision gifted to these eyes. Engulfed by the serenity small waves against the shore, shimmering elegance of dancing light leaving me completely a peace, fueling my desire for more. In the theater of the cosmos the star takes the stage, performing for the crowd a magical moment, as the artist creates. |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Beautiful job RPT40! |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?And what better artist, than the Artist of the Sky? You have done well to honor Him and His wordcraft with yours!! |
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BLUE BAY MOON Bay moon, blue, o’er waters sleep Rest above this darkened deep Night covers all in starry keep To bliss awed eyes as hearts leap Air stirs sweet in lilac scent Joyful mind in kind presents Comfort pure, such not relents Cheers grace in beauty’s evidence. Last edited by Marsink 01-03-2011 at 05:55:30 PM |
In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.
Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.