Are you the young man!

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    Are you the young man!

    Are you the young man
    who's name stays ringing in my home
    Are you the young man
    singing sweet voice mails on her phone
    Are you the young man
    who has this girl so in love
    She wished for a angle now when she sees you
    she whispers thank you as looks up above
    Are you the young man
    that put that wedding band on her hand
    Are you the young man
    that scared away all her friends
    Are you that young man
    that put that make up on her eye
    she wore big sunglasses all day
    just so she wouldn't have to lie
    Are you the young man
    Who made her so sick of you
    how could you blame her when you left her home with nothing to do
    She was a prisoner in her own home
    she was to scared to take stand
    cause she knew you controlled her life with only your bare hands
    Are you the young man
    who left her sick in the bed
    come to find out her sickness wasn't sickness
    you left her laying in the bed for dead
    Are you the young man
    Excuse me sir i need to know
    so i can step out the car, pop my trunk and grab my pistol
    Nice to meet you....Im her mom!

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    babyfire04 commented on Are you the young man!

    06-10-2009

    Very powerful. I like the ending but it needs to flow a little better. A small tweak maybe, Overall it's a wonderful poem, very compelling

    The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

    Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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