As I close my eyes to write......

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    As I close my eyes to write......

    As the night falls upon the vented sky
    A new thought arises in the depths of my mind
    In darkness,the isolation yearns for sport
    My heart squeezed, contorted is a pleasure to me
    What causes the casualty of an allotted question?
    Perhaps the form of another in the deepest depression?
    My outlook is bitter to the end of a day
    The night formed, delays, to a poet at bay
    As she write upon a grave, desecrating remains
    I remain lost in my dream-scape, simple and plain.

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    Altair commented on As I close my eyes to write......

    04-24-2010

    another masterpiece dream, and yet another format to your expression. Why o why do you only have three poems, you have mastered a craft, perhaps you wait to flood the site with a deluge of colors, you are awesome. this poem digs deep into the mind of a poet as she yearns to create a new piece, and in the process, ventures off into the distant yet nigh surroundings. Love it

    dreamscape

    04/24/2010

    You cannot imagine my joy when I noticed you commenting on my poems...thank you so much for stopping by and blessing me with your wonderful insight and compliments...

    jademelissa74 commented on As I close my eyes to write......

    03-22-2010

    At face value, this holds much depth in itself, as if there was a hidden message behind it. A true metaphorical piece with a rhyming flow. You are very talented. I have really enjoyed this piece. Indeed, provocative!

    dreamscape

    04/23/2010

    why thank you Jade, your comments are soothing =)

    MalikPeterson commented on As I close my eyes to write......

    03-18-2010

    the descriptive language in this piece is strong and I harp upon your imagery again...because...I like to see a piece as I read it. When its images jump off of the page and pull me in...that is when I know that kudos are in order :)

    dreamscape

    03/18/2010

    =)

    DeepEclipse commented on As I close my eyes to write......

    02-26-2010

    I like poems like this that keep a steady rhythmatic tone. To me it speaks in a morbid way, but still holds the prize of its imagination. Like a hand that has lost all feeling except how to write. So it writes on everything it sees with everything it feels.

    UnoMono commented on As I close my eyes to write......

    02-24-2010

    This poem is good. I applaud the descriptive tone you set instanly. I saw the whole poem thru till the end.

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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