Brighter Star

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Brighter Star

The days and months the year goes by and my life is still the same.
I move ahead ten thousand steps then ten thousand back again.
I've lost a sense of who I am and what I'l like to be...I stumble through the darkness 'til that's all that I can see.
Turn on the light, life lingers there...it wasn't meant for deep despair.
You're hopes and dreams can still be met...you're young life isn't over yet.
The silly things that break your heart can help you plan a brand new start.  So look for good things new and bright...Please always keep your goals in sight.
Time can change the way things are and lead us to a brighter star.

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poetheart87 commented on Brighter Star

02-01-2010

I like this. It's so true about life, I think. Hopefully you'll find yourself.

fmrdancer commented on Brighter Star

10-03-2009

A beautifully written poem. So many truisms in it, Certain parts make me feel as if you know me. Well done.

MrGee commented on Brighter Star

09-25-2009

This is a well written poem. The rhymn and rhythmn are very good. And u paint a good picture in the readers mind. And i especially enjoy reading the last line - Time can change the way things are and lead us to a brighter star. You also make good use of metaphors. Many poets at this site fail to use metaphors which I consider often essential when writing verses. now to the rating i give this work a 10. and wud appreciate ur reading my poem The Heart

WinterFrost commented on Brighter Star

09-24-2009

Well... hope is a good thing or so optimists tell us :) It is a nice and uplifting poem Nice read Winter

candycan

09/24/2009

thanks for your comment i feel deplete with pride

teasasue commented on Brighter Star

09-21-2009

this is a good poem, I enjoyed the message in it, please keep writting

Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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