CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM...

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    Iam learning Sonnet & the <abab or aabb, cdcde or cdcdcd & gg>

    CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM...

    To make a correction is part of Constructive Criticism

    It is not to embarrassed u

    To make a constructive criticism

    Is to “become-the-best-version-of-yourself”

     

    To persevere is being determined to work for your best

    Trying walking is an attempt to leave the wheelchair

    To have faith with God is the best attempt

    Try trusting Him because He gave u another chance

    A chance to move on, accept all the hardship and Become-the-Best-Version-of-Yourself.

     

    To persevere is being determined to work for your best

    Trying walking is an attempt to leave the wheelchair

    To have faith with God is the best attempt

    Try trusting Him because He gave u another chance

    To be determined is to persevere

    Try to trust God & yourself because God knows you can do it.

     

    Accepting everything is not always the good to succeed & reach the Best Version of Yourself

    Accepting your daughter not speak or walk is not what God wants for you because He knows u can do your best & it is only on your decision.

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

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    carmentis commented on CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM...

    07-09-2009

    well i like the repetiveness in it , its good no doubt i dont have a feel for your writting style yet so i will look at more of your work as time passes to get a sharper pciture

    optimistic commented on CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM...

    07-08-2009

    This poem was grea I like the idea in the long subject and discussion on the forum, well written in poem style to explain an important thing.

    jademelissa74 commented on CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM...

    07-08-2009

    Sonnet is a poem, properly expressive of a single, complete thought, idea, or sentiment! I can see your pattern. Great job!

    StandingBear commented on CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM...

    07-07-2009

    A nice work relating for all to be the best version of themselves possible. "To make a correction is part of Constructive Criticism" Great lines, great write.

    Jackie

    07/07/2009

    U mean I can write Sonnets now? wow!

    StandingBear

    07/10/2009

    I'm sure you can write whatever you wish with the great talent you have.

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA