Deep Ocean

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    Deep Ocean

    Swimming out in the open seas feeling like noone around .
    Crying out for help and noone hearing your calls .
    Swimming with the Sharks and loosing your mind out in the
    deep dark ocean .
    Feeling like your drowning and about to take your last breathe .
    Like a captin loosing his ship , spiraling down fast , your dreams
    seems like their fading away .
    Trying to see the light in the deep ocean .

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    mla commented on Deep Ocean

    02-13-2011

    A captain losing his ship would feel like drowning. Now that I think about this that is a good analogy. Thank you. Swimming with the sharks is a good analogy for being a woman - is it not? A woman in business, or life.

    pumbaa commented on Deep Ocean

    03-19-2009

    I like this one alot

    YvonneMarieD32

    07/06/2009

    ty it took me 2 days it about my youngest brother he havent been his self sent are mom past away

    mla commented on Deep Ocean

    03-06-2009

    Your poem was very upbeat. How did you do that?

    YvonneMarieD32

    07/06/2009

    i wrote it then my boyfriend put a few words more in it ty

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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