Haiku - Clouds

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Haiku - Clouds

Watching clouds go by

Building mountains in the sky

And castles of white

 

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litilraven commented on Haiku - Clouds

08-20-2010

From reading the other Haikus, I'm not as fond of this one near as much. I'm not real sure why exactly....it seems kind of bland in a way... like, it's too much sky going on or something?? lol, I know I'm not expressing this well either!

kaddeesh

08/20/2010

Thanks for sharing, Litilraven. I appreciate your comments always.

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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