Life's Murder

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  • Mischif
  • Writing some new poems. I'll have them up and ready to pleasure your imaginative minds soon.

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No I Do Not Have One lol a friend of mine does and is horribly stressed and i wrote this cause it's on my mind and if i did have one this is how i would feel. Be safe ya'll

Life's Murder

The pain is agonizing
My vision blurred and twisted
The blood beneath my skin boiling
I talk but no one seems to be listening

Panicking as I struggle to search
For the phone which i originally dropped
As i find it and bend to pick it up
Light's go out,pulse,gone heart stopped

Suddenly a rush of electricity
Runs through my body, my eyes see bright lights
Heaven was my first thought
Then the doctor spoke and asked a nurse for the time

As my eyes adjust to the stage bright light's
I think to myself what happened to me
Almost on cue the doctor says i had
A heart attack and suddenly i couldn't breath

I asked if I'll live, he said yes with a grin
A cop comes in and asks what happened at home
I told him the last thing i clearly remember
Was standing in my room talking on the phone

He asked if i remembered the topic of
the conversation i was having i said no
Hours go bye as i try to unpuzzle my mind
Then i remembered and the second heart attack goes

Revived yet again I tell the doctor
if it happens again to just let me die
Cause to me having that STD means
for me there is no more life.

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Crush commented on Life's Murder

08-31-2009

this is original...tells a story that is hard to rhyme but your slant rhymes are magical. it was like a short story beautifully told in a few stanzas. well done and very, very interesting, sir. thank u.

alreedus commented on Life's Murder

08-02-2009

Whoa. Emotion exudes in this write. I feel the pain and I feel the remorse. This is truly "out there" where the reader can touch it. Nice. Nice. :-) -Alan

purdylox commented on Life's Murder

07-18-2009

I dont think I completely understand but it seems this poem is written about someone finding out they have HIV or something. I would like to know maybe you could explain it to me sorry I cant get it.

scrye commented on Life's Murder

07-18-2009

Mischif your pain is quite obvious in your work here or can relate very well to someone else's pain? Don't know which but can feel through your words. Well done, well written and very well placed. I give it a 10

Mischif

07/25/2009

I can relate i guess...I have a gift to put myself in a situation ive never fully felt and yet describe it...

oneloveALZ commented on Life's Murder

07-10-2009

damnn....i like this poem alot jay this is something you never hear people talk about

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

Mischif’s Poems (23)

Title Comments
Title Comments
Life's Murder 5
Passion 11
Why Not 1
Be Yourself 3
Cheat 3
Love Is Fake 1
Faith 0
You Mean 1
Ghetto 1
Morning 0
Rain Memories 0
So much to say Too little To late 0
My Love 0
5 Senses of Us 2
Untitled 1
Rewind 0
Once Again 0
After Love 0
Truth 2
Love 2
Everyday 2
For Every Raindrop 1
Shower Beauty 2