MoViiN' Mountains

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    MoViiN' Mountains

    [Moving Mountains] Each day the pain escalades to unhuman proportions. I feel like a baby put up for abortion. I try to move past, but its impossible [Moving Mountains]. When i begin to move, my foot slips, I try to pick it up and move, but i'm paralyzed. This is too much for me to bear. People seem as if they don't care.. But if they don't fine.. I guess this is my mountain and i'll move it alone

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    joewv commented on MoViiN' Mountains

    08-10-2009

    heart felt i like it thats pretty good i keep it up

    jacorieaaron

    08/10/2009

    Thanks

    cmlestrade commented on MoViiN' Mountains

    07-14-2009

    Nice poem a bit sardonic . I forget time and again to check spelling and grammar when I write but it makes it a little hard for the reader. Did you mean the pain escalates? I was confused because Escalade is the scaling of fortified walls using ladders and that would be a very interesting idea in regards to your prose. All in all I found it very moving. I think it's a ten.

    jacorieaaron

    08/10/2009

    Thank You SOO much for you input! You're helping me become the writer i want to be.

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