My first kiss

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    My first kiss

     When you smile I know your happy.
    my first kiss
    When I laugh you know you
    said something funny.
    my first kiss
    When he crys i know theres
    something wrong but he just
    keeps it inside and wont tell me.
    my first kiss
    When he touches my face it
    makes me feel good to know he loves me.
    my first kiss
    When i go to kiss him he holds
    me tight and says,
    "I love you forever and ever babe."
    for that was my first kiss.


    By: Krystal Bushnell

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    ChaoticCayla commented on My first kiss

    03-06-2010

    Krystal...you are amazing at writting poetry. I love this one :)
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    bushnell1993

    05/12/2010

    Heyyy bestiee[[= The bestfrienddd [= IMISSSYOUU..

    cliftondurant commented on My first kiss

    07-20-2009

    make me rmember my first kiss as you live you will fine true love good job
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    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Hey thankss.. ((: I hope your first kiss was great too!! im getting new poems on so you can read more soon..

    sk8ergirl commented on My first kiss

    07-20-2009

    that was a good poem for your age { what everyone tells me haha} a lot of emotion great write
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    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Okkkay thanksss ((: Hope to read more of your poems also..

    Troubador commented on My first kiss

    07-20-2009

    This poem is filled the emotion of an innocent love that is blossoming. Ah I remember it well,twas some 30 years ago but I remember it as if it just happened. I was so clumsy and a little afraid. you know what if I didn't do it right. The poem itself is I am sorry to say rather poorly constructed. could have used some stanza breaks and some punctuation. My advice would be to study some love poetry ie sonnets of the Porteugese and some Shakespear. I feel that if you keep writing you will increase your word power immensely and become fruitful in your poetic journey, therefore keep writing
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    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Ohh.. Thanks for the advice .. I will look into them. I have more poems just havent got them on yet... but soon there will be more.

    Jene commented on My first kiss

    07-20-2009

    aww that so passionate and you can actually see whats going and feel it as well great job missy!
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    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Ohh thanks.. thats really nice.. lol --bushn

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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