You and me Meant to be.?

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    You and me Meant to be.?

     I see you in the hallway.
    Your teeth are perfect,
    the hair is hot!

    When you look at me,
    don't you see what you want?
    You and me meant to be? 

    I love your smile,
    them juicy lookin lips of yours.

    I know you want me too!
    But why won't you admit it.
    when I say I love you
    I know it is true
    But will we really last forever?
    Are we really     meant to be?
    I dont know
    But i like the way were going
    so say.......
    I love you too.

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    1990lh commented on You and me Meant to be.?

    07-22-2009

    great poem love it it was very sweet full of love.
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    Dreamer123 commented on You and me Meant to be.?

    07-20-2009

    AWWWW!! this is so sweet and alot about teenage love affairs. keep up the great work girl! you rock! :D made me wonder. thanks for sharing.
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    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Well thank you dreamer. I am soon puting more poems on. but you should check them out. i will write you or something.? ((: --bush

    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Well thank you dreamer. I am soon puting more poems on. but you should check them out. i will write you or something.? ((: --bush

    Dreamer123

    07/20/2009

    :D I'm glad I will write more as well

    sk8ergirl commented on You and me Meant to be.?

    07-20-2009

    cool teenage love great write. keep writing and i like the feeling
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    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Ohhh tnankss. you keep writing too.. ha

    Troubador commented on You and me Meant to be.?

    07-20-2009

    Teenage love what a concept the emotion is well detailed in your words. The poem is better constructed than the other one you used punctuation, yay! I have a problem with incorrectness when it comes to the use of elipses when it is mispelled so to say ... 3 dots not four or seven as you have used. I also think that you could have used a stanza break in between But will we really last forever? and Are we really meant to be? However, I do not discount the emotion that this piece conveys. I will give this poem a higher ranking on account of you used punctuation.
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    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Well thanks troub.. .I really like your advice.. Its okay everyone has pet peeves.. haha for example i dont do names with out a caps. Idkk.? but thanks..

    Jene commented on You and me Meant to be.?

    07-20-2009

    awww that i love poem thats so sweet you really felt that way about him. he means a lot to you lol. great job dear!
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    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Um.. Well Thank you actually yea i kinda did. lol he was adorable.. lol Im going to be putting new poems on soon.. you should check them outt.

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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