MY GOD

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MY GOD

I WANT TO GO TO HEAVEN WHEN I DIE
TO LIVE WITH MY GOD IN THE SKY.
I'M STRIVING TO DO HIS WILL IN EVERY WAY
SO THAT HE WILL BLESS ME EACH AND EVERY DAY.
WHEN I'M DOWN HE'S THERE TO LIFT ME UP
EVEN WHEN I THINK THE GOING IS TOO ROUGH.
THE DEVIL IS ALWAYS TRYING TO KEEP ME DOWN,
BUT I LOOK TO GOD, AND HE REMOVES MY FROWN.
GOD LOVES THE LITTLE CHILDREN,
AND HE LOVES US BIG ONES TOO.
SO WHENEVER YOU ARE IN TROUBLE, JUST CALL HIM
AND HE WILL COME TO YOUR RESCUE.
HE WILL HEAL YOUR BODY AND SAVE YOUR SOUL
JUST KEEP THE FAITH AND YOU WILL BE MADE WHOLE.
ALL YOUR HEALING MAY NOT COME AT ONCE.
JUST REMAIN PATIENT AND KIND.
GOD WILL ANSWER YOUR PRAYERS, BUT IN HIS OWN TIME.
HE WAS THERE YESTERDAY, TODAY AND WILL BE TOMORROW,
SO WHY SIT AND WORRY,GET UP AND DROP THAT FEELING OF SORROW.
JUST TRUST AND BELEIVE WITH ALL YOUR MIGHT,
CONTINUE TO FOLLOW HIM FOR HE IS THE WAY, THE TRUTH AND THE LIFE.
SO WORRY AND FRET NOT
IT WON'T GAIN A HAIR ON YOUR HEAD.
JUST KEEP ON PRAYING
BECAUSE MY GOD IS NOT DEAD.

Lucille E. Cotton

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bustaryme commented on MY GOD

05-29-2009

mssuebee, I would not create in all caps. I agree with the first reviewer, place stanzas so that the your poem can flow and threader can go with the flow.

mssuebee

06/23/2009

Thank you for your comments, I will take them to heart and try to learn from them, but as I told the first reviewer, I am not a poet, I just write what I feel.

debskatz commented on MY GOD

02-23-2009

Hi mssuebee, First of all, you need to have some separation into stanzas & it would read better. Not all of the rhymes are true rhymes, for example: "up" & "rough" don't even come close. Then you change your rhyme scheme, which is fine, but you need a break at least between the different rhyme schemes. Your rhythm is non-existent. It has a lot of potential, just needs some work.

mssuebee

06/23/2009

Than you for your constructive/destrutive comments, however since I am not a poet I just write what I feel

manicmechanic commented on MY GOD

12-05-2008

nice and very true,god bless you and keep the faith

mssuebee

06/23/2009

Thank you so vey Much, you don"t know how much your comment means to me.

Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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