My Mind Dances
Toes dug deepin the cool
submissive sand.
An imperfect sunset-
gray and paling
peeks meekly from
behind a wall of clouds.
Sustained by
warm coffee,
a hot head,
and a cold heart,
my mind
dances.
My Mind Dances
5 Comments
in the cool
submissive sand.
An imperfect sunset-
gray and paling
peeks meekly from
behind a wall of clouds.
Sustained by
warm coffee,
a hot head,
and a cold heart,
my mind
dances.
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Poem Comments
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Kaiprin commented on My Mind Dances
12-09-2009
- Very brief, but I feel it could have explained why your mind danced with a little bit more detail. Still, I understand the point and I appreciate your effort. Keep trying.
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dancinghawk commented on My Mind Dances
10-18-2009
- ah, this is beautiful and descriptive ... i can feel the beach ... and love the lines "a hot head, / and a cold heart" ...
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Marsink commented on My Mind Dances
10-18-2009
- The imagery is very effective and it's clear that your state of mind is much like the horizon you reveal.
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SavVySam commented on My Mind Dances
09-12-2009
- I like this! We have all been there! Anger can often be the perfect muse to inspire unusual gems like this one! Good work!
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HarverTomsson commented on My Mind Dances
09-04-2009
- Not too happy, but gritty and real. One can see your backbone, and the set of your chin against the wind. Submission is for others.
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