Nowhere For You To Sleep

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I wrote this one a long time ago. I think I was having a Dyaln Thomas moment with this one.

Nowhere For You To Sleep

Nowhere for you to sleep, but on the street.
Go old man, go sleep on that cold steel grate.
Beware! Beware! rats may gnaw at your feet.
Don't give up the fight, Don't die in defeat,
don't let your soul be consumed by your hate.
Nowhere for you to sleep, but on the street.
Sleep lightly old veteran of the street.
The vermin of the night could seal your fate.
Beware! Beware! rats may gnaw at your feet.
Fight back, the street is no place for the meek.
Regain your pride and your place in the state.
Nowhere for you to sleep, but on the street.
Don't walk in circles with sores on your feet.
Go back through life's gate before it's too late.
Beware! Beware! rats may gnaw at your feet.
This abyss will leave you hollow and beat.
You must abdicate your place by the grate.
Nowhere for you to sleep, but on the street.
Beware! Beware! rats may gnaw at your feet.

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fred1932 commented on Nowhere For You To Sleep

08-25-2009

thats tight i like it . i'm not the rhyming type but at times you have to go down that avenue. you have rhythm. put more into it

Beagle commented on Nowhere For You To Sleep

06-03-2009

I really like this - you've done it all here - the imagery and the repetition - along with the rhyme scheme - it is just excellent!

kinnycut

06/03/2009

Thank you for the comment. I wrote this in college. I love writing in different styles and formats. However, anything close to metered verse still poses a challenge I sometimes can't resist.

When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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