24 hrs 2 live

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    24 hrs 2 live

    All you got is 24 hrs 2 live
    How do you survive this death sentence bid
    I don't know but I heard it went down like thizz
    I didn't have any Alka-Seltzer,but I fealt the plop-plop,fizz,fizz
    The relief didn't quite hit me
    As muscles started to contract and squeeze me
    Blood is boiling and it's getting hot in here
    I better get out of this place and get some air
    But the more I move the more I hit the wall
    I can see str8 but everything seems to be getting small
    Temperature's rising as I start to slide
    Thing getting dark as I look at theses pink and purple skies
    Everything is shaking and shutting down
    My feet are in the air and I can't feel the ground
    Is this how it is right before your dead?
    Cuz I coulda sworn somebody was grabbing my head
    15 seconds later I was blinded by the light
    I can remember them saying"She put up a good fight"
    A tear rolled down my face as my dad kissed my eyes
    Cuz all I had was 24 hrs 2 live while my mom had 24 hrs 2 die

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    slohan4u commented on 24 hrs 2 live

    07-10-2009

    I like it. lots going on. i felt the plop-plop fizz fizz---------- was almost funny. keep up the good work.
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    sherriee1 commented on 24 hrs 2 live

    02-21-2009

    A very touching poem. I lost my Father to cancer. I know that feeling. A feeling of helplessness.
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    Chi commented on 24 hrs 2 live

    02-12-2009

    sounds like a good suspense movie.....I love it! Chi
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    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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