Betrayel

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    Betrayel

    When all is lost
    and no one care's
    and all your friends
    have dead stare's
    and your greatest thing
    is gone for good
    there's nothing left
    where she once stood
    my greatest thing
    is gone for good
    hidden from me
    kept from my sight
    I can see in the dark
    blinded by the light
    a friend's betrayel
    has left me stranded
    all alone
    I am left standin'
    alone in the dark
    I'm surrounded by light
    my fist's are clenched
    I am ready to fight

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    TinaD commented on Betrayel

    12-07-2010

    I like the cadence of this poem. I also like that it expresses sadness, anger along with hope. Thanks for sharing.

    sherry122 commented on Betrayel

    02-09-2010

    Nicely done, I like your style, short sentences, and I also like the rimes…;)

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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