I Lay

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A poem I made for a friend under an hour.

I Lay

 

Here I lay, reminiscing all the moments,
I stare above and see the night sky,
The sky was lonely as I, starless and dark,
I lay, wondering, if somewhere across the globe, you think the same thoughts.

I lay unmoving,
Controlling the urge to give in,
All efforts to do so was futile,
Thinking of us, not knowing what to expect,
Left and betrayed by my courage,
Emotion filled me, loneliness and sorrow.
As a single tear drops, multitude of others follows.

 

 

I lay, feeling the uselessness of my efforts,
All bravery and courage drained,
Robbed of my good judgment,
Any logical and reasonable train of thought abandoned,
Feeling helpless, meaningless, fruitless, abortive, pointless, purposeless and most of all incompetent.

 

 

I lay, as I've always have laid,
When my world was empty and you weren't there,
Now, that world embodies me again.
A world of full of darkness,
A world of a winding and never-ending road,
A world without you.

 

 

I lay, as darkness overshadows me,
Emotions overlapping,
Despair creeping closer,
Finally, it is all over...

 

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cttgad commented on I Lay

09-20-2012

I love the emotion and visuals in this poem. A great read. thank you

LeonPride

09/21/2012

Thank you for the feedback. :)

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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