unfinished

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unfinished

you make numb when the times are right

you make me forget when i've had a bad night

you keep me a float i this world so high

i dare you touch me i dare you to try

the more i take of you the more i need

the less i take of you the more i bleed

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Charlie23 commented on unfinished

09-06-2009

This is an amazing poem, comes across to me as a spiritually inspired poem!

Alone commented on unfinished

06-10-2009

I am personaly a fan of the shorter poems. i like to write them because they seem to leave the reader wanting more and it seems to make them think about the situation more than a poem that drags on for a page.

dmann commented on unfinished

05-10-2009

i can relate this poem to my addictions

xxlheart commented on unfinished

05-06-2009

okay so this is my very first read of your work and this is my worthless opinion. you seem to have a lot of life and pain in your heart and this piece only scratches the surface. can't wait to read more of you. i love "real-life" poetry. a small suggestion would be to keep it raw and straight from your heart without thinking. it shows you have talent and passion. very nice write!

lonewolf commented on unfinished

04-25-2009

very good. wish there would have been more though

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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