Afterwards

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    sOMETIMES i THINK THAT ITS ALL ABOUT MOMENTS IN TIME THAT WE EXPERIENCE AND HOW WE WISH TO INTERPRET THEM SO YOU SEE OUR VISION SHARED.

    Afterwards

     Looking up she see's his eyes upon her
    Smiling into them in return is the secrets of moments before
    Delight in his presance and company evident in the softness of her eyes and face
    Daily routine oft times done without thought
    Now the moment shared bringing about shyness
    Complete is the joy that she feel within
    That he is there right now still bringing thoughts of Wow
    So long awaited this time complete is the feeling within
    He is here he is mine
    She will savor she will taste
    She will live and enjoy all he will give
    And in the all she will taste the love of a lifetime
    Looking up she meets his eyes
    Iamadreamr
    copywrite 8/15/09 K.D.G.

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    dahlusion commented on Afterwards

    08-23-2009

    This is like a soothing dip in a pool of warm mineral water in the open air of the Travatien desert hot springs: sensual and dreamy.
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    Iamadreamr

    08/23/2009

    yes you see my vision complete!!

    nettieforce1 commented on Afterwards

    08-19-2009

    very nice. i really like the rhythm of your poem.love the phrase: "daily routine oft times done without thought now the moment shared bringing about shyness" that is very truly seen and deftly expressed. this poem just needs a rewrite to tighten it up a bit, but definitely a hit!
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    Iamadreamr

    08/19/2009

    I thank you for your input it is always appreciated and I agree I should have put a bit more into it.

    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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