an empty poem

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    One of those nights I couldn’t sleep. Must be the moon?  No.  Whatever it was, I did manage to write a poem about it only to find out I really wrote nothing.

    an empty poem


    when moonlight floods the night with gloom
    and fill the dark space of my room,
    i marvel why thoughts of you must
    rekindle my poetic lust.

    with wondrous words my pen can find,
    i spilled my heart, released my mind;
    till i found out how so unfair
    for words to leave me in despair.

    to speak of rhyme my poem is tough
    but merely words are not enough
    to tell the passion i have had!
    what is in you that drives me mad?

    can i express what words cannot;
    to write this poem is pointless, but-
    must you inspire a fool to write
    and suffer one more sleepless night!

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    stellar commented on an empty poem

    12-07-2009

    I love the rhythm of this poem as well as how you play with words...Excellent!

    zaphnathpaaneah

    12/08/2009

    thank you for your kind comments my new friend. zaph

    casp1 commented on an empty poem

    11-28-2009

    NICE WRITING MY FRIEND....COOL IMAGERY .. I DIG IT....

    zaphnathpaaneah

    11/28/2009

    thank you my new friend. zaph

    ginga commented on an empty poem

    11-12-2009

    Z, LOL! I love the pondering, the subtle humor, and all the thoughts of your sleepless, but not poemless night. ginga

    zaphnathpaaneah

    11/28/2009

    glad you love it, ginga. some of my poems were results of sleepless nights... and sometimes vice versa. thank you my friend. zaph

    SavVySam commented on an empty poem

    11-08-2009

    "moonlight floods the night with gloom" But you bring passion and life to another wonderful work! Write on... indeed you should! Very nice!

    zaphnathpaaneah

    11/22/2009

    thank you for the boost my friend. i shall endeavor... zaph.

    Stryx commented on an empty poem

    10-01-2009

    In poetry we try to express what we cannot say with words in any other way. Sometimes it is crystal clear to the reader, sometimes the reader must stretch for understanding. A good poet prods

    zaphnathpaaneah

    10/07/2009

    thank you for your insights stryx. zaph

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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