Colored passionate

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Ships may stray from the shore but even storms can't keep the strongest from home.

Colored passionate

Was it the color of her kiss?
The sting of the eyes who would bring me 
such dark bliss for eternity?
 No light shined on the hope for a better day,
The day after she stole color from my world.
The whimsical madness of our love was corrupt now.
How to hold on when letting go is impossible?
Strength rose up, beyond hope, beyond imagination 
of what dreams we'd painted for our lives together. 
A seemless fold encloses her heart around mine again.
We are willed. We are strong. We are vibrant once again 
Even a year to the day after she stole the color from my world,
We are what we were always meant to be. Colored passionate. 
My mind still wanders in the darkness that she shone on that day.

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dahlusion commented on Colored passionate

05-02-2013

Love the opening line; such beautifully sad emptiness—bravo!

MootPoint commented on Colored passionate

05-02-2013

I think you meant, "What is the color of her kiss" I would also say, "The whimsical madness of our love is corrupt now". "Was" doesn't work as well. I really like the ending and the imagination and description this poem shows.

dahlusion

05/02/2013

Excellent editing!

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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