Self realization

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Self realization

Seemingly dark. No lights, no windows. In hours of solitude his eyes
grew custom to the black. Blindness became a world of delineation, as
silhouettes became the rulers of the world. Objects were their shadows as his dark side too evolved. Caliginous began the sable revolution as his brain played vulnerable to the inevitable mutiny of peccant existence. With every tear, every exagerated weep of anger, his light dimmed. And as his world was raped of illumination, his soul was inspired with it. An Edifacation for happiness. The bright iniquity that consumed his now acquiescent anima drew itself from confinement with a capricious parturition! The rebirth of man exists now in the rise of pernicious might. He is the river in the the canyon, the relentless wind
against the immovable mountain. He is the feeling of hate and revenge, belittled by a human instinct to counter act invinisblity, reformed and ignited with the fuel of understanding. Bound no more by the pathetic restraints of morality, he can achieve prepotency over a vast universe of imperfection. Delusional and dangerous he rises to his feet, flooding the room with unbalance as he unveils the sun. Through the mirrior his eyes are brilliant. A cold blue that traps your conscience in trust and hope. His presence is dignified and clean. An ambassador of heaven would look no more angelic than his welcoming smile. But as the light dances throught he room revealing what is real and beautiful, and good, he is blind to the innocence and all he can see is his shadow.

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Springsize commented on Self realization

03-13-2010

she is the moon - You have asked for a critique and I will begin with the easiest... the two mechanical errors 1. Line 2nd to last line should read ? dances through the room instead of "dances throught he room". 2. Line 11 invincibility is misspelled as "invinisbility" And now for the message and your intent. You have shown Reader that you have a fairly educated and vocabulary-rich mind.... but I would prefer simplier words, as it took me almost 15 minutes to look up all of your unusual and 'nar-used ones. And... after all of my internet dictionary searches, I strung each of your words together, in their dictionary meanings, like a string full of pearls... I know you feel so strongly that they are worthy... and I respect this... and hope I don't misinterpret. I believe you're speaking of feeling overpowered, helpless against corruption where the body gives in too easily. "weep of anger" is interesting... but I do not understand how your word "rape" can be an inspiration, as it is never listed as a positive act. But then you continue and describe one who sparkles other people into believing (his insanity), but they are mistruths, and the Alice's mirror of looking backwards is used to show how opposite his "teachings" are from the truth... as if Godly experiences were dancing around in the room and the backwards preacher is blind to innocence and sees only his shadow. And... now I am curious to know what the innocence is, of which the preacher is blind... and I don't know how to bring a summation to a poem, of which I have missed a piece of the meaning... ie.. the rape as inspiration... but I am more than curious to know who the blind preacher is and I hope you will write more and describe this Wonderland Cheater, in depth.

orsonav commented on Self realization

02-22-2009

Very nice write. Keep up the good work.

prophesy commented on Self realization

02-15-2009

the president/nice

Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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