sickness from within

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    sickness from within

    The days i spent in my closed mind were like the days of a sea lost crew in never ending horizion of grey and blue, washing the worn boards beneath their feet.

    This subtle feeling and ice gaining size in the bottom of my instincts where my gut lies , transparent facail expressions mothered by the despair i feel, i look out my windows i call my eyes , Foggy and unclear like a child breathing on a cold window and looking at the rain outside.

    I remember the days when it was bright ,warm and hot all at once the humindty of excitment hung in the air making me sweat like runner in race of joy and triumph crossing the line ,but those are thoughts that make the stones in my head and belly even more heavy to bare.

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    Chaos128 commented on sickness from within

    08-24-2009

    A grim (and well written) exposition, Axe; I don’t see the end of hope here (assuming that this piece is an account of your own experience), as isolating the source of your disquiet is the first step toward eliminating it. Hard hitting stuff… you got the power!

    writerspassion commented on sickness from within

    01-24-2009

    Sounds like your a little lost to me. nicely put here

    Bethane1978 commented on sickness from within

    01-21-2009

    Excellent

    Phoenix9 commented on sickness from within

    01-21-2009

    interesting visualization, well done

    bforibus commented on sickness from within

    01-21-2009

    the fear of forgotten memories and lost accomplishments can always weigh heavy on the heart. very gud write

    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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