Water

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  • Sadness

    Water

    Trickle first drip
    drop trickle first
    then flood human
    water salty oceans
    slide
    Wow how could
    one human hold
    it retain so much
    of....the water?
    pin prick
    no feeling
    knife wound
    no kneeling
    child rips
    through precious
    lips.. no squealing
    just grunting and sweating
    and pushing then
    rest and healing
    unconditional loving

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    mp31love commented on Water

    06-18-2009

    This is a really good write. You get a 10 here! Very creative!

    Phoenix9 commented on Water

    05-16-2009

    a 10 great write, great form

    StandingBear commented on Water

    05-13-2009

    Child birth a beautiful act of motherly love. Great write.

    dahlusion commented on Water

    04-24-2009

    This is a mouthful of interesting phrases, words, and creativity.

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