Bright eyes

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    I have 3 daughters and two sons and this is the love that I have for them and the questions I pray about everyday

    Bright eyes

    My life centers around your bright eyes
    I am determined and strong because of your bright eyes
    I have no fear and run from nothing because of your bright eyes
    I have cried tears of joy and of pain from your bright eyes
    Your life started with me your bright eyes pleaded with me to love you
    You asked me to keep you safe and secure
    I looked into your bright eyes and knew my life would start and end with you

    My children you ask me for love when I look in your bright eyes
    I believe in myself and my abliites because you looked at me with those bright eyes

    Your life keeps me going it give's me purpose
    I look at you and see my love in your bright eyes
    I wish to be great for you
    I ask you to love me
    I pray that my love will propel you to greatness
    My dreams are for your success

    You have saved my life
    encouraged me to be more
    I wan't to give you more
    I would like to be everything that you believe I am
    My children this is just day saying his prayer

    I know that you are listening to me
    Your bright eyes tell me so
    And Daddy love your bright eyes

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    koliegirl commented on Bright eyes

    09-05-2009

    This is a beautiful poem written for your twins. I really enjoyed reading it. I have no critiques, nothing negative to say, except I think you misspelled dad in the fourth line from the bottom.

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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