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Derp. I have noooo ideaaa. I don't know how I should tag this? :3

Or

Kill me now
Why prolong my pain?
Kill me now,
destroy my suffering.
Kill me now,
You'll be doing me a favor.
OR, if you wanted,
you could do something else.
Hug me now,
end every sadness in me.
Hold me now,
tell me it'll be alright.
Kiss me now,
Help me live.
But whatever you do,
make it last forever.

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Flinker commented on Or

10-14-2011

Nice back and forth with the lines. I like the title, but I think you can get more out of the last line by making it more surprising.

LilliannaFenton

11/06/2011

True...I may fiddle with it a bit, thanks! (:

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

LilliannaFenton’s Poems (27)

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