Take My Heart

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  • Lost Love

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    Inspired from a poem I wrote in 7th grade that upon reading now I hate so I completely transformed into something else while trying to keep the general meaning.

    Take My Heart

     Take my heart
    the heart you've torn
    the two halves tarnished from your scorn
    shredded to bits that no longer fits
    I don't want it anymore

    Take my heart
    the heart you stole
    disabling my body and soul
    I'm lost and dazed and you're unfazed
    I don't want it anymore

    Take my heart
    the heart you crushed
    my blood would rush whenever we touched
    I fashioned love from beastly passion
    I don't want it anymore

    Where's your heart?
    the heart you hide
    the one I could never get inside
    It's now clear you were never sincere
    I don't want it anymore

    Where's your heart?
    the heart you screen
    are you really just selfish and mean?
    Their not the same, my heart and yours
    I don't want either anymore.

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    phatdaddee commented on Take My Heart

    10-23-2012

    This reads like a song, I can picture it put to music! Great poem.
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    SecretAngel3

    10/29/2012

    Thank you. I thought so too!

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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