Running the Risk

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  • Allegory

    Running the Risk

    Earned or walked
    the player does not balk
    at getting safe to base
    avoiding the embarrassed
    strike out

    Yet the journey around
    the bases just begun
    stays not safely hung like
    a pennant

    Rested or weary
    the player does not curry
    favor from coach, team, or stands by
    avoiding the demands to try and
    reach next base

    Unrelenting the journey continues as
    the bases must be run to
    the demand, "Play ball!" or to
    "Batter up!"

    Advanced or stolen
    the player does not foreknow
    how only that one must
    avoid the dangerous trap
    between bases

    The journey to the next
    base safely begins unsafe as
    the player takes a risk to
    lead off

    Leaning and stretching
    like a marionette the player dances
    chances leaving the safe base
    risks running toward
    the next base

    The player's journey depends
    not on what was but will be
    reached before the final call,
    "You're out!"

    Sweat and dirt
    testify to the player's efforts
    courage and moxie to lead
    leave and risk moving forward until
    the winning run victoriously crosses
    home plate

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    soulwriter commented on Running the Risk

    05-14-2009

    Great use of allegory, the mixed meaning takes the reader around life's bases and is well concluded with "the final call - you're out!". Write on write on!

    Weatherstone

    06/03/2009

    Thanks for the encouragement soulwriter. I really appreciate it.

    RHPeat commented on Running the Risk

    05-08-2009

    Weatherstone: I like the content of the poem but the overuse of the word player doesn't hold me as a reader. Are you still open to an in depth critique? I am still looking for one. Get back to me if you are.

    Dusty commented on Running the Risk

    04-08-2009

    Weatherstone! Wow!...i think you hit a home run with this one! (I had to say that!) :)Very nice!

    stormimartin commented on Running the Risk

    04-07-2009

    This is definately a good poem. I really liked reading it from the stand point of being a softball player. But you can also look at this as in life. Round the bases and crossing home plate. You can read this piece in many different aspects of life. That is what I got from it and thats why I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing!

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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