the dark dream(the figure)

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the dark dream(the figure)

walking alone through empty halls,
a black figure stalks the black.
slinking along the shadowed walls,
while evil eyes peer through the cracks.

moon light hides behind clouds,
the whistling breeze brings a chill,
moving ever so slowly from behind its shroud,
out to do its horrible will.

the figure stops at a chamber door,
waves its skeleton hands,
the door opens with a sound of squeaking boards,
and enters the bedroom of a man.

the man,unknowing, gently sleeps,
not knowing whats near his bed.
the dark figure,closer it creeps,
so it can spread its dread.

it touches his icy finger to his head,
and in a deep voice mumbles,
then starts a shaking or the bed,
and the walls rumble.

all grows silent and nothing is heard,
the mans soul is now set free,
the figrre lifts its vail with out a word,
my god, the figure is me

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aweems commented on the dark dream(the figure)

10-21-2009

really good a little creepy but its good . i enjoy reading ur poems

Marsink commented on the dark dream(the figure)

10-21-2009

Are you the messenger of death? (the figure that first enters the room) very dark and riveting. you can spell check or proofread. (of course, I'm guilty of letting a few 'get away') Once posted, can't be editted. but, you could delete it and re-post after it's polished. (make sure you have the complete poem or it could become a re-write: done that too on Doubts Prisoners) GOOD STUFF don't let the ink well empty.

mindkiller420

10/21/2009

thank you for your comment.its always good to have honest,constructive critisizm.thank you for taking the time to read.

Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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