In or Out

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In or Out

someone let me out of this box
in it i have seen nothing
i have leaned nothing
enclosed in a space completly and utterly strange to me
not sure how to make it work
in a confined space that has little
no way to communicate
these walls around me make me weary
weak with no ambition
surrounded by the oddities that mean nothing
in bleak gray moments
somehow i step out
feeling like nothing is going to happen
seeing the pointless, meaningless, theory lacking empty space
in this box
nothing will work
nothing will become of this nothingness
as if the pages were blank, the walls are hollow
empty
cut a window, make a door
there is a way out
but it will not be in my normality
my comfortabllity
this box is what has created me
but i see out of this cut window
and i make one step out of the newly formed door
a new day
out of this box

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optimistic commented on In or Out

01-29-2011

I seeing a meaning of getting of this place were they take writing away from you. or a place where you feel confound in every breath you take you can say this is a very good write. I like the last line a new day out of this box.

Musicmynded1 commented on In or Out

01-18-2011

very nice outlook put into words.. nice and descriptive.

Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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