if i could see

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    • lemuwah
    • is trudging, try, wandering thru, trying to find what I'm to do.

    if i could see
    Sometimes I see the truth in your eyes
    other times I can't see beyond the lies.
    Sometimes I wish your heart could see
    this love I hide deep inside me.
    you placed a steel blanket around your heart
    so that no other could tear it apart
    Sustained behind all your chains
    My efforts-all were in vain
    I'd like to think I made some imprint
    have I left a scratch, tear, or footprint?
    All my tears misting around
    not a one will reach the ground
    Searching my mind for the slightest trace
    In that blanket do I have a place??

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    cmlestrade commented on if i could see

    09-12-2009

    very good writing. the rhyming is very good as well as your rhythm. It can be very frustrating when one can't or won't commit and we can't discover the reason.
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    SILKYTWEED commented on if i could see

    09-09-2009

    Great Write, tight flow...very special....Thanks for sharing!
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    gogant commented on if i could see

    09-03-2009

    Sometimes we feel as though we'll never know for sure if a love is a truth or fictional blur in our mind. We can hide from it, cover ourselves with protective armor, and still it slips in without a hint. Very nice dear...
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    Hampton commented on if i could see

    09-01-2009

    Very nicely done. To penetrate the barriers one has created requires infinite patience.
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    Charlie23 commented on if i could see

    08-29-2009

    This is very well written! My favorite line, "you place a steel blanket around your heart" I just love that! I also have a poem in contest, "How do we get there?" if you have time to take a look at it and leave a comment, I'd greatly appreciate it!
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    Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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