Riding the Subway

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    Riding the Subway

    One step off the train
    A garbled call
    The door slams shut
    Engines rev
    Cars lurch forward

    Alone on the platform
    Smells of exhaust
    A labyrinth of lines on the wall
    A gaping tunnel left and right
    Stairs to, I don’t know where

    Cars screech to a halt
    Engines idle
    The door flings open
    A garbled call
    One step onto the train

    Alone in the car
    Smells of exhaust
    A blur of lights on the wall
    Closed doors left and right
    Seats for, I don’t know who

    Cars screech to a halt
    Engines idle
    The door flings open
    A garbled call
    One step off the train

    Repeat
    Repeat
    Repeat
    Repeat
    Repeat

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    rsalassi commented on Riding the Subway

    09-13-2010

    I've read many poems using the daily subway ride as a metaphor for many different thoughts, but your poem treats the monotony as a reassurance itself.
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    ginga commented on Riding the Subway

    08-24-2010

    Winter, Nice to come and read again. Just wondering if you're been riding the subway? Seems this poem came from one entranced in riding the train for awhile. I liked the juxtaposing of the lines from stanza to stanza, by the end the reader realizes the subject has each stop's routine down pat. ginga
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