The Chase

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    I was challenged to write a poem about a donut.This is what I got after about 5 minutes.Not my best but I passed the challenge.

    The Chase

    when you look at me
    you wouldnt think
    I have the thoughs I do.
     I want to die a quick death
    even though I was born five minutes ago.
    No I am not a child or a living creature
    but I still have thoughts of death.
    They only get worse
    when the person who bought me
    is a cop licking his lips.
    If I had legs I would run
    because I know he couldnt catch me.
     Id be running and yelling "hurry up fat boy."
     Most people would find it strange to see a cop chasing a donut
     who is yelling "catch me if you can"
    but if I was human I think Id find it hilarious.
     Cops and donuts have always been enemies.
     Its about time that a donut wins for once
    and if I cannot succeed I will gladly die trying.

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    1990lh commented on The Chase

    08-11-2009

    lol funny like the whole personification thing of a donut nice write

    Iliketoflyaway commented on The Chase

    08-11-2009

    I like your poem the idea is realistic.The line that stands out is Id be running and yelling hurry up fat boy.

    firepixie commented on The Chase

    08-09-2009

    Thats really good for a challenge poem, especially if it only took 5 minutes. it is super funny, too! xD

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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