Fluids

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    I don't feel good. I'm stuck at school and I don't feel good. I hate it.

    Fluids

     Struggling to breathe
    Dark dreary eyes
    Weak
    Tired
    Longing for the air
    A bed of feathers
    Hot mint tea
    Sniffle
    Sniffle
    The occasional sneeze
    I've a dry mouth
    Sickly
    Yet living
    Too close to you
    Closeness made me ill 

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    hannahxP commented on Fluids

    04-21-2011

    am i being blamed for this? lol i like it its a good description of bein sick and it has a good rhythem................................
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    chemicalcuke

    04/22/2011

    I blame you for a lot of things lol I'm not blaming you per se, just including you in a poem

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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