The sting

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  • Confusion
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  • Emotional
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  • Lost Love

    Poem Commentary

    I'm not gonna lie, I'm very upset right now. I needed some way to vent, no matter where, no matter how cryptic.

    The sting

     There was
    Beauty unmatched
    A girl like no other
    Sweet and kind
    Gentle young one
    So soft
    So beautiful
    I felt
    Alive
    Emotions mean nothing
    Now
    It only takes one
    To ruin it
    One
    Sick, disgusting, loathful
    Man
    I'm trying not to lose it
    I'm on the edge
    Ready to destroy him
    Make him hurt
    For these lies
    The last bit of the fuse
    My tears show me
    That I'm still alive
    She was cold
    I wish
    I was the one
    To keep her warm

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    ESSENCEOFLOVE commented on The sting

    12-06-2010

    I love your emotional, off the cuff way of writing. This was cryptic and intriguing. The emotion flowed off the pages through your words. Write on..........E
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    Tempestlady commented on The sting

    12-04-2010

    "It just takes one" a very poignant line. Liked the rhythm and the rhyme. The form is different, and disrupts the readers flow. However the meaning and emotion it provoked in me were honest and hit home. Write on.....
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    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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