one day

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one day

The day was long, the sun was hot
As we walked across this parking lot.
As the bottom of my shoe did melt
The heat was strong on my toe, I felt.

I did not know quite what to do
So I jut took of my melted shoe
Which I later found out was a big mistate
For I soon steped on a great big snake

The snake was black with eyes of red
That crossed it seems when I crushed its head
I took one look and screamed so loud
That any girl would be very proud

I looked around and felt absurd
For all I could hear was a bird.
Then I turned to my friend and smiled
But he didn't speak for quite awhile.

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HIP13044b commented on one day

12-20-2010

Very good!! I find it difficult to write humor, you make it look easy.

ApaqRasgirl commented on one day

10-14-2010

very well done dear, your rhythm and rhyme flowed very well throughout the entire piece...wonderful read....thanks for sharing.....love asha

redbloodink commented on one day

10-14-2010

I just liked this write... reminded me of when Jesus stepped down off His thron and crushed satans head and bruised His heel... ty for the reminder.... red

spbsdude commented on one day

09-30-2010

Cute, amusing little ditty. I liked it and it made me smile.

gogant commented on one day

05-17-2010

I guess you could say, that you had a bad day...but it worked out okay (I think)..................A nice little dittyg

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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