Love's Last Breath

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  • True Love
    • JamilahAyanna
    • It's been a 5 year dry spell, but I'm back 😘😘

    Poem Commentary

    This poem was inspired simply by love and what betta way to spell love then J-A-M-A-L-I-E..........

    Love's Last Breath

    There you were right in front of me too close for the human eye,
    So beautiful I was unworthy to look at u as u passed by,
    A diamond amongst the coal shining bright in a world so dull,
    Gleaming wonders as others lives seemed so null,
    Flawless is how I pictured you, breathtaking was your smile,
    I found myself in love with you shortly afterwhile,
    Lost within the moment, fascinated by your grace,
    Speechless by suprise and yet still so much to say,
    Whenever I think about you my body gets hot and I get weak in the knees,
    Your love is like a disease,
    It gets inside my body and spreads through to the top,
    I get this amazing feeling and I dont want it to stop,
    These feelings I have for you cant be described with the word love,
    This is far more powerful it goes beyond and above,
    Why is it that others can only make me smile when telling a joke,
    But you made me smile at the very moment we first spoke,
    Amazing is what I call you, superhuman is what you are,
    You're the most incredible human being I've met by far,
    Never happier til now there's nothing more perfect than us,
    I only wish to make you happy and gain all your trust,
    I knew when we first talked you were someone I wanted to pursue,
    And you're the only guy who can turn this lonely one into two,
    I know what I need and it couldn't be any clearer,
    My heart lies in the hands of the man you see in the mirror,
    Why it took so long to find you no one can tell,
    All that matters is you're here now and I'm trapped in your spell,
    When I see the rainfall interract with the sun,
    It reminds me of two different hearts like ours finally becoming one,
    I wanna hold you in my arms and love you with all of my heart,
    We're lyke a Michael Jackson song and our love is off the charts,
    Captivated by your words I'm in love with the things you say,
    Your literature is uplifting to my soul in every way,
    Stop looking for "her" cause I'm the one you've been feigning,
    My love is forever and that should give you something to believe in
    I've broken down my walls and given you my trust,
    I'm willing to give up all my I's just to make "us",
    If you trust me with your heart I'll promise to do the same,
    Isn't it true, I'm the only girl crazii enough to keep you sane,
    I can be all that you need and I'm crazy enough to marry you,
    When life knocks you down lean on me baby and I'll carry you,
    I'm really diggin this smile that you put across my face,
    It's unimaginable to think someone could take your place,
    Knight in shining armor? No you're my king with a royal crown,
    Just lyke ya best man Conway Twitty said, I'd love to lay you down,
    Loving you for all eternity would be the easiest of tasks,
    And there's absolutely no doubt that we could make it last,
    They say you can only be born once and this is true,
    But I feel as if I was born again when I'm with you,
    It doesn't matter how others may feel cause you'll always be my best,
    You're the only thing on my mind and I dont care for the rest,
    Take all of me and my heart with all its impurities,
    And I'll love you for life no matter what your insecurities,
    Like a cool breeze on a warm night you bring me so much relief,
    How a man like you is taken for granted brings upon such disbelief,
    Baby I'm right here......"I'M RIGHT HERE" to love you as you'd intend,
    I cannot love you til the end as my love for you will never end,
    I'll always be right here no matter what you choose to do,
    Just waiting for the day when I can finally have you.....

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    prophesy commented on Love's Last Breath

    02-22-2010

    your love has spoken, i feel of her warmth, contiue to love, the/poet prophesy

    JamilahAyanna

    02/23/2010

    Thank u very much 4 ur input my friend...

    HakiNatuwah1 commented on Love's Last Breath

    02-22-2010

    wow...look at my little caterpillar become a butterfly...do I dare catch one again..."To be Seen, but not Touched"...(^_^)...

    JamilahAyanna

    02/23/2010

    :) I would lyke 2 think I'm worth da catch....thanx alot...

    HennessyJ commented on Love's Last Breath

    01-04-2010

    I have what feels like a million poems about Love but yours is definitively clear and precise it speaks volumes of your talent and character keep writing

    BrokenAngel210 commented on Love's Last Breath

    12-24-2009

    i had to add this one to my favorites. i especially like these perticular lines: "My heart lies in the hands of the man you see in the mirror" and " I've broken down my walls and given you my trust, I'm willing to give up all my I's just to make "us"," and my favorite line of all: "I knew when we first talked you were someone I wanted to pursue," the last one is my fav because it's not very often we hear of women asking a man to marry us, it's commonly the other way around...but i asked my husband to marry me. there was just something about him i couldn't see myself letting go. i felt like if i let him go back to egypt, i'd probably never would've gotten to see him again. and for all i could've known is that i would've let a good thing go. but i praise God because God Willing we are going on 4 years married now! i am happy i listened to my heart. and i am happy to have read this poem! amazing!

    JamilahAyanna

    01/04/2010

    Thank u so much for your kind words of wisdom and may your journey thru your prosporous marriage lead you thru the path of happiness and long lasting joy....

    jesusfreake commented on Love's Last Breath

    12-15-2009

    this is so wonderful coming from someone ur age...there are no words to describe this...its so beautiful

    JamilahAyanna

    01/04/2010

    Thank u very much and u seem to be a very young and apiring writer yourself. Never let the flame die down if writing is one of your passions, continue to better yourself and good luck in your journey....

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    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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