Comatose

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I love him, he barely knows i exist.  Cliche but true

Comatose

My dreams are filled with thoughts of you,
your smile it haunts me still.
If you will not be with me,
I wish you'd go for good.

If i glance over my shoulder, i swear I see you following,
yet i know you would could never,
But my heart still longs to dream.

You were always on your path so straight,
scared to walk with me along the crooked.
My subconcious tried to cope,
by making a world just for the both of us.

There, you kiss me everyday,
your body held close to mine.
There, tender touch was all it took,
and i was yours forever.

I'd run into my world,
escaping the truth of you and I.
But now I've finally escaped,
and you've run out of time.

I'm trapped inside my enchanting world,
but your trapped behind a wall of glass.
I swear I heard you whisper to me,
but the walls protect my heart.

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knight4696 commented on Comatose

01-30-2010

Andrew - you certainly have a unique talent. You convey your emotions so well. Very nice work!

BrokenAndrew

02/16/2010

thank you again. You alwasy say such nice things

tykehall commented on Comatose

01-05-2010

another fine example of a good grouping of words.you truly have a talent keep writing and thanx 4 sharing

Nadia1986 commented on Comatose

11-18-2009

It sucks when we like someone but they don't know it and they don't see who we are. Everyone has gone thought this at least one time I would have to say nice work.

BrokenAndrew

11/18/2009

Thank you!

Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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