My slice of heaven

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for a class .. our view on our own heaven

My slice of heaven

Leaving this day to day hell

I float up to something surreal

Escape this materialistic and malicious place

As my slate in being wiped clean

The memories flash by

Slowly submerging from my corpse

Entering my cloud filled utopia

Where all the lies deteriorate into fairy dust

Leaving me bare with truth

Sitting on my real cloud 9

I would replay every mistake and add a happy ending as the climatic twist

Relive falling in love

I’d try to sweep away my loved ones tears

Extinguishing their fears

And fly like an angle to save someone in need

A place where every food I desire appears out of thin air

And gas prices never go up

Where there is no reason to put up a front

Purity being the only cloak I wear

Things are truly all good

No pink pony’s unicorns and frilly b.s.

Just a divine sacred serenity

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mamasan commented on My slice of heaven

11-04-2009

Ah your goals are truly lofty; it sounds like you may have found paradise or perhaps reality of living and getting thru the maze with a minimum of hurt. You know, I am impressed by your words which attest to many lessons well learned. I predict a good future for you because you have learned the secret that after all you are in control. Go for it, young lady............

jenifer commented on My slice of heaven

08-19-2009

wow, intertesing way of seing the life ,the divine and the future....................................................................

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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