saw you

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    saw you

     I walked along 
    one day 
    to see you
    After considering 
    a while

    I peered through 
     
    saw you 
    not alone

    Your fiery eyes 
    were smiling 
    showing readiness
    to the response 
    they ignited 
    As you closed in
    Seductively 
    devouring

    I leaned forward

    before leaving

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    Grommet commented on saw you

    06-07-2009

    yeah, that is fun, mischievous, daring. Frustrating to stop. good pace wham bam thank you maam. Can you define additional reaction or emotion to more ully close out the thought without leaving us wondering?
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    IzzyGumbo commented on saw you

    05-30-2009

    this is an outstanding write. perfect in wording and flow to my eyes opinion and well written. Bravo my new friend. :)
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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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