slow struggle

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    slow struggle

     slowly you slip away from me
    i miss your smell
    i miss your voice
    your everything
    you were everything my hero
    i looked up to you
    now i dont have anything
    im slipping into bad habbits that i dont like
    & stuff thats so not me
    i cant cope with it anymore im suffocating
    my breaths getting shallower
    now my heart pounds
    & as i lay here i say "he was my best friend my brother my everything and now hes not here i can't go on"
    my eyes now closed
    breathing even shallower
    heart slowing down
    i take a big gasp of air and say
    "i dont have to miss him now for i will be with him i can finally be me again & not hide behind my pain"
    i slowly open my eyes look around and say " I LOVE YOU all dont be sad for i have died for the one i love & miss"i close my eyes & my breathing has come to a hault
    my heart beats one last time & then ........................
    im gone im with the one i love once more

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    wheelsal commented on slow struggle

    06-26-2009

    This is a great feel for pain and the passion it sends you to. Keep writing. I hope it helps......
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    connsk8 commented on slow struggle

    06-26-2009

    I know what it is iike to lose someone you hold so close to you you feel like a part of yourself is gone and you have put it so beautifully it hurts to read about it, your passion and the love you feel comes through every word that is written, it is a slow struggle but do not give up hope, there is a group called compassionatefriends.org, they have a special chat room just for siblings....
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    ilymanny

    06/28/2009

    thank you for that i will deff. go there and check it out it was really hard but i have got a lil better it was 5 years ago but it still hurts u know i guess i just have to be very strong thats all i can do and thats what i have learned to do

    UnworthyFather commented on slow struggle

    06-19-2009

    Another great poem, ilymanny. I agree with Erika that you have a very unique way of sharing the pain and anguish that you feel inside. May God bless and keep you. Thank you for sharing. 10 Marcus
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    jademelissa74 commented on slow struggle

    06-19-2009

    There is so much pain portrayed through this poem. You have a way of sharing the pain and anger that you feel with us, the readers. You have managed to write a well-written poem! God bless you!
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    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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