Brackets

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Brackets


I still remember the first series of predictive conversation:

Smiling as I do, but the ones at the time are matchless.

(You employed brackets when you weren’t supposed to)

(I liked you so I did too).

 

First, something warm would rush its walls

As (far from) innocence gave way to play,

And one X became two, then three, then fourteen once

                (I counted)

After I delighted you with a compliment you weren’t expecting.

 

Payments skied and shyness dissolved as a tongue

So used to being bitten whilst acidic snipes rained around

Was set free to practise its rusty lines. The times

I nearly failed, nearly nipped it in the bud, never to see

 

Such a beautiful bloom as you and I.

That particular time (about the butterfly tattoo),

When you failed to seal your sentence with a kiss,

You damn right nearly broke my

 

Thumb, as I hastily replied in enquiry/ apology/ both.

(Turns out you were making tea and rushing).

You caught me, I said.

To catch you, you’d have to be falling, you said.

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PoetWithCancer commented on Brackets

11-14-2010

Dear Aaron, // Your poem "Brackets" is more than just an experiment in form. Once again, it takes some things in particular to your life, and makes them meaningful to me. It's called the universal, meaning that nearly everyone has felt such things, and that you stir those feelings and express them. // I'm glad that you want to experiment. It shows that you are not only someone who wishes to share your innermost heart, and can do so--making you a true poet; but that you are also a true artist, concerned with form and music, as well as with meaning and emotion. // May I suggest that you study Stanislaski? The great Russian stage actor and director, Constantin Stanislavski. His teachings and methods for actors--which involve getting in touch with your deepest feelings and accessing them for your art--are also an excellent help for poets. // When I say that your are in some ways and at some times still a "fledgling poet" that is not meant to be disparaging. You are already, now, a true poet, and a better poetic artist than many, many of the poets I admire and enjoy. Good and great poets, the greatest treasure in my heart's memories, next to love. // But you have the potential to grow and develop as a poet and artist. I think studying Stanislaski will help with that. // He wrote a number of books, each of which is wonderful and could help any artist in any kind of art. I recommend as a start a little book called "An Actor Prepares." // I continue to read your poems, and I will comment when I have the energy (left over from all the other things I have to do) to give them the time and attention they deserve. // Goodbye now, fellow poet. // --Michael LP, Mr. Poet

arronpalmer

11/15/2010

Michael, thank you once again for your kind and in-depth comments. I had taken no offence at your description of my stage in writing, rather I was honoured you had seen it fit to comment on it at all, as it suggested you thought I could 'fully fledge' one day. Talking of which, I will definitely check out Stanislaski's books, thank you so much for the recommendation. I hope this reply finds you in (relatively) good health. Arron

StandingBear commented on Brackets

11-12-2010

Quite an interesting style to say the least. Nice, flowing write.

arronpalmer

11/13/2010

Hey SB, thank you so much, I'm so pleased people are reacting positively to my experiment with form :)

smoothdame commented on Brackets

11-12-2010

well done my favorite part was (you employed brackets when you weren't supposed to) (I liked you so I did too). I liked what you did with this poem great job very descriptive.

arronpalmer

11/13/2010

Hey SD, thanks so much!! That's my fav too!

koolmom0 commented on Brackets

11-12-2010

This is a very well written piece, imaginative and inviting to the reader. You told a wonderful tale. I particularly enjoyed the last line...to catch you...you would have to be falling...hmmm...did she capture your heart as it fell for her? This is a very interesting poem. 10++

arronpalmer

11/13/2010

She did indeed KM, and that last line cheekily hints at the fact that she knew she had too! Thank you so much for your kind comment, this one intended to put a smile on readers' faces, so I'm glad it pleased you :)

kdarcy commented on Brackets

11-12-2010

Like your style, some excellent lines in this write, it was both a pleasure and fun to read, be well k

arronpalmer

11/13/2010

Thank you so much K! That really means a lot, lately I've been writing more light-hearted poetry, and I'm glad you found this fun :)

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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