Murderers of Love

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This poem is the way my life is now... I'm a prisoner in my own home because my parents wont let me be with the one I love... They don't trust me because they don't trust him...Yet we're holding on, hoping that one day they will have a change in heart and realize how much in love we are... and I will continue to pray and hope that someday, maybe not soon, we will be able to be together, like we always dreamed....

Murderers of Love

Have you ever loved someone,
your parents hated,
because of how he is,
and who he has dated?

Your parents don't trust him,
and try to pull apart,
the relationship you have,
from the very start.

They ask where you're going.
and the people there,
if you say his name,
they give a disgusted stare.

Then they don't let you go,
and now can't trust you,
your home becomes a prison,
with nothing to do.

But yet inside,
you know his heart is good,
a great guy,
just simply misunderstood.

And you keep trying,
to think of a way,
to get them to like him,
but not sure what to say.

Since you can't talk,
they will continue to nag,
it'll wear you down,
like a dirty old rag.

You somehow keep holding on,
to him oh so tight,
because you love him,
with all of your might.

We think of our future,
and hope it's sunny and bright,
to be with each other,
every night.

To marry,
and buy a house,
to have kids,
and be the perfect spouse.

Then, just then, life will be perfect,
and also fair,
because now, no one can complain,
of the love we both share.

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orracle commented on Murderers of Love

09-08-2009

I can definately feel your pain and frustration in your words. You won't always have to answer to parental authority, so take comfort in knowing this. And hold on to your feelings for one another, for strength comes from enduring a unwanted burden.

scrye commented on Murderers of Love

09-06-2009

no worries hun your parents problems are not yours. Now for your poem. Prose pefect. Stanzas well placed and your imagery was spot on. Only 17 very well done and i see a talented artist amongst our midst bravo and a definate ten from me.

dumplin commented on Murderers of Love

09-06-2009

wow, if only dreams could come true for you, little girl. you are more talented than you give yourself credit for. I want you to read my poem called "Is It You?". Thanks for sharing.

1990lh commented on Murderers of Love

09-06-2009

wow p that was great u express urfeeling very well i enjoyed really ur poem i was like i ww were having a conversation and i was just the listener great job i shall give u a 10

ginga commented on Murderers of Love

08-28-2009

edgar, A fascinating poem of hope, love and future. I hope it all works out for you. ginga

Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

edgarApoe10’s Poems (53)

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"Hi" 2
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Heart Can't Trust 1
Saved from Loneliness 1
Without a Frown 1
Love Unknown 1
Missing You 2
Oh Little Raven 2
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Sadie Hawkins 1
Remember, You Promised... 1
Surprise Me, Please 0
Only Wishing 1
Seventeen Years of Waiting 0
Yearning for You 0
Eyes 1
Thousand Times I've Cried 2
The Worst Kind of Killer 1
Tears I Weep 0
Will You Be My Neighbor? 1
Late Night's Passion 0
Stay 0
My Inner Rage 0
Together Forever 0
Somehow I'll Win 1
I Am Alone 0
So Long, So Close, Together Again 0
Loneliness...
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Going Insane 4
My Dear Silent Friend 2
My Cage 0
Murderers of Love 6
Future Without You 1
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My Prince Charming 0
Stay With You 2
Gossip 1
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Lonely High-School 1
Pains For You 0
Senior Year 1
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Keep Praying 0
I Am Here 0
Your Tumor 0
Words Spoken 1
A Breath of Faith 1