ASH and SILK

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  • Fantasy
    • queenrosered
    • Waiting for escrow to close on our new house in Vegas...will still visit Mexico often! Sorry I've been away so long from this site! Great to be "home" :D

    Poem Commentary

    A bit of Royal fantasy, hope you will enjoy, relate to and hopefully, rate. Thanks so much, Rose. :)

    ASH and SILK

    Last night, in dreams, I was a Queen;
    My kingdom such a wonderland!
    The Knight's well-muscled, tall and lean,
    My ladies dressed in manner grand.


    No one was hungry, no one scared;
    All safe and sound in this domain.
    No one was angry,peace was shared;
    As 'round us, winged angels sang.


    And all around the palace walls,
    Candles placed to light the paths;
    Ten thousand lit as evening falls,
    A night for holding lovers fast.


    Silk are your lover's lips on yours,
    Such skillful kisses, playful pats.
    Then rain clouds burst, begin to pour;
    Candles sputter, turn to ash.


    It seemed so real and felt so right;
    Freely flowing wine and milk.
    'Till sun's intrusion chased moon's light
    Leaving naught but ash and silk.

     

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    dumplin commented on ASH and SILK

    01-16-2010

    This is not only romantic and a wonderful dream of peace, but it is also very melodic. I could very easily see it put to song.

    queenrosered

    01/16/2010

    Thanks so much Dumplin!! That was so very sweet of you. Can't believe that I forgot that I even posted this one here!! Appreciate it sweetie!! XD

    graceladymn commented on ASH and SILK

    10-02-2009

    Creative fantasy, well written, draws in the reader throughout, I didn't find any stumbling points anywhere in the read. I want to comment though, that interactions flowing smoothly like this does happen in real life, when folks are well balanced they all joyfully participate in uplifting interactions, even if someone is struggling the others presence helps uplift perhaps because of energy influences. So though candles blow out, well meaning folks continue well meaning and lovers who have intentional highest good in mind can relate in all situations even in the middle of chaos, I don't think its fantasy but it does take mindfulness. Enjoyed this read.

    queenrosered

    10/02/2009

    Thank you Grace for a well-thought out comment!The fantasy part of this was my being the "Queen" and everything was just so lovely, much more like a dream than any reality and vice versa. Thanks again! Rose. :)

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