pursuing my dreams

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pursuing my dreams

i've lost my dreams, never again to find.
intertwinement
       within the vines
       within the vines of simple minds,
                             of simple minds bent.
       why?, can not i find just one kind
                                 simple piece of mind.
                                           peace of mind? this my time
                                                                 this my time spent.
i've lost my dreams,  tossed to thy streams.
                                            thy streams?, how they flow
                                                                how they flow so slow.
                                                    but from where could they grow?
                                           it seems my tears would show.
                         i have fears of loneliness and now you know.
i've lost my dreams, where did they go?

               tyke

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SavVySam commented on pursuing my dreams

10-02-2009

Your interesting form was instrumental to the overall feel of this piece. Nice flow and meter. Thanks for sharing.

knight4696 commented on pursuing my dreams

09-09-2009

Tyke - I like the way you spaced this one. It works very well with the verse. I also like the questions. it made me stop to think. Good job with this one too. By the way - slow down with the postings, I can't keep up :)

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

tykehall’s Poems (43)

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Feeling Acquainted,Ar
e We?
1
I Love You 2
love? 1
silver bird dove 1
if there were love?, (now that's a different story), altogether 3
love for some, play for others 1
final dimension 2
and the answer is...........
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1
the scout made to pout 1
little roy screw 1
he did me father 2
rising to the occasion 2
( day dreaming ), with eyes wide opened 1
a familiar stranger 1
and still i can believe in him 1
just a quickie 2
my dearest 2
a stand 1
self realization 1
coping with composure 2
parting past 2
sparks 3
the space your absence fills 2
looking out at the world from the belly of a wolf 2
inside the ride 1
life's savings 1
pursuing my dreams 2
the yin and the yang 1
pook's lullaby 1
just a thought at hand 1
happily married 4
orchid midnight 1
just friends; and then? 1
one branch (observation) 1
you, sharing me;who cares? 1
sing, memorabilia, sing 1
floating hearts 1
waiting (is something i can do) for him 3
a revealed vision of love 1
trick of the trade 2
a superb absurdity (did occur to me) 1
p.i.m. entry 11/28/04 2