Read At Your Own Risk

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I will leave this a mystery

Read At Your Own Risk

Death threatens life by our own making,
the sanctity of which we have been foresaking.
Our nation; land of the free home of the brave.
Yet our warriors have became our indentured slave.

Patriotism is a crock of shit,
Those who return do so unfit.
War is the problem sure
Legalized murder on tour.

My boy wrote home the other day.
Saying the bulllets they flew every which way,
mortars exploded about my head.
I looked to my buddy, but he was dead

The endless massacre of mind and men,
governments  do it again and again.
It is done now for our retribution 
They cleared it by our constitution

Surely, I thank them for what they have done.
Ridding the evil from under the sun
Malevolence in earth it does abound
Bullets and explosions make a horrid sound

The other day my son had told to me,
"He was coming home forever free."
A town car pulled up in front of our house,
everything halted as silent as a mouse.

Out from the car stepped a captain and lieutenant.
My wife was thrilled, her joy was not repentant. 
Joyfilled both of us were there standing,
the captain spoke with his voice soft yet commanding.

They both had stood in front of me,
Hat in hand the captain said solemnly
,"On September fifth at two thirty one,
The field hospital at Kandahar was overrun."

My wife she panicked at the awful news.
Sorrow and pain crowded all my views.
Tears flowed from her eyes of green,
Her heartache was the worst I ever seen.

She crumbled into my arms for rest,
her tearfilled eyespressed into my chest.
Anger within me swelled for my boy,
remembering the times filled with joy.

Masses of bodies encompassing me,
death as far as my eye can see,
the light displays in the approaching dawn,
huddled bodies all putrid and wan

Mercy was not present for them,
their lives the bombs did suspend.
Flames surround the ashes of the dead.
True horror such I had not ever read.

Bodies upon graves endlessly pleading.
The war encroaching never receding.
Harrowed halls where worshippers pray,
littered with the faithful dead as they lay.

The catholic punishment may it now begin
For living thier lives of unending sin.
Shadows of mercy entertained them not,
for their lives of sin they receive their lot

Into each nature a little pain must fall,
pity the ignorant of true lifes call
For their pain it shall be great,
ignorance of truth seals their fate
















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WordSlinger commented on Read At Your Own Risk

02-21-2010

This poem touched me, I really admire this, and it's strength.

photochick commented on Read At Your Own Risk

09-03-2009

Wow Troubador I am glad that you decided to post this poem it has so much depth to it and a strong message very touching sad and poetic leaves the reader in such a state of awe its surreal fantastic job in so many different ways imagery was superb this is just all around a great poem an art piece and masterpiece going into my favs i hope this loss is that of fiction for its something no parent should have to live when that car pulls up and those soldiers step out there is no words to describe how your heart just vaporizes thanks for writing this poem and then posting it for i know you were in battle with your self to post it or not but let me tell you its a grand thing that you did so many need to read this for its true in all it says i am from a military family and I know this story all to well great job troubador 10 for sure with out a second thought

dumplin commented on Read At Your Own Risk

09-01-2009

Look, Troub, I usually critique on English, Punctuation, Spacing, Content and Art, but I'm going to forgo the first three here and just give you a 10 for this awesome piece.

BooTz commented on Read At Your Own Risk

09-01-2009

a sad poem to say the least. in most pplz eyez, ignorance is bliss. very good poem tho.

bforibus commented on Read At Your Own Risk

09-01-2009

war. what the fuck is it good for. this piece enrages the reader. i would love to say i'm patriotic, but I can't. it's a waste of life. for what reasons. to allow me to be free. why can't i bare arms on my own defense. why can't me and my neighbor see the enemy and be brothers at arms. its so much i want to say, hell do. i'm just hoping that this is ficitonal because i can't imagine the pain you all are still feeling from this lost. if so . i pray u have found a little peace in that chaotic system

When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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