SHINE

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SHINE

IM TIRED OF PEOPLE CRYING 
AND IM TIRED OF PEOPLE DYING.
IT GIVES ME SO MUCH PAIN
TO WALK OUT THE DOOR SEEING POORS AND POORS OF RAIN.
HAVING MUCH SORROW FOR MISTAKES THAT WE ALL MAKE
I WONDER WHICH PATH SHOULD I TAKE .
FOR IT WILL SOON BE MY DECISION TO MAKE
AND WITH EVERY STEP THAT I TAKE WILL SOON GUIDE ME TO MY FAITH.
LEAVING THOSE FOOTPRINTS OF MINES BEHIND
SHOWING CLUES AND THE WAY THAT I SHINED.

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bjroach55 commented on SHINE

10-10-2009

awesome poem your style and choice of words in this poem are showing you mature in your writing some.

almonord1990

10/10/2009

thanks but there are mistakes do to not rereading my work lol.

MIKE3447 commented on SHINE

10-04-2009

NOW THIS IS VERY TOUCHING. YOU GOT RIGHT TO THE POINT IN THIS. LOVE IT ABOUT TO SHED A TEAR.

Kdaddy commented on SHINE

10-04-2009

I agree with Stryx, you remind me of myself when I was a young man writing. I felt I had to write it all down so fast to get it out of me! I have learned that my poetry is more appreciated when it has quality to it, no misspelled words and grammar mistakes. You definately have something we want to hear from you, but your mistakes take away from the message.

Stryx commented on SHINE

10-04-2009

Please - Quality WAAaaaay before quantity.No need to rush.

almonord1990

10/04/2009

OK I GOT U

Stryx commented on SHINE

10-04-2009

Work with a dictionary and a thesaurus. Don't work without them. They are so important for you to be understood.

almonord1990

10/04/2009

LOL OK

Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

almonord1990’s Poems (28)

Title Comments
Title Comments
In the mist of my eyes 2
3 Times her size 5
Feeling the sheets 3
Meeting a girl’s father 2
I am so in love with you 1
Drifting 1
Don't forget about the love 2
Preparing me 1
Our hearts beat as one 1
I wear the pants in this relationship 2
I can feel it in the wind. 3
You are the maker of who I am 3
I have to be real 1
I will 2
CHANGING MY LIFE 4
Mother Set Me Free 3
HIGHER 4
SHINE 6
STEP BY STEP 2
LOVE KILLS 2
Father and son 2
Tragedy 4
your past 3
the fight 3
Did you ever dream? 5
Using You 7
The Strangest Feelings 6
My Type Of Women 7