The Mistakes Of Mankind

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The Mistakes Of Mankind

Yungteflon added a picture on the Poetry forum for all of us to write a poem to according to the picture he posted here is the poem I wrote - check it out:

The Mistakes Of Mankind

 Here in this picture is a life that’s been shakin’,
Torn in to pieces from mistakes we’ve been makin’.
What’s done in the dark it shall come to light,
It was a cover up to make beautiful this terrible sight.
People now extinct mankind have made clones,
We’re trapped by machines in terminated zones.
Their skins cracking and peeling now we can see,
That mankind enslaved itself to this machinery.
Automation took the place of the works of our hands,
We’re not building, plowing, and constructing the lands.
These clones they looked real but never fooled me,
We should keep people employed for we need certainty.
Our lives have been wrecked and torn into pieces,
We didn’t learn a thing from our strategy and thesis.
We should’ve listened to God and loved one another,
The results would’ve been different my sister and brother.
But yet it’s not over for the resistance still live,
Salvation from our mistakes Our God will still give.

Much Love For The Sake Of Mankind,
KD (King David Of Is-Real / The Angelical Warrior)

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Clementinewoods commented on The Mistakes Of Mankind

06-10-2009

Another outstanding work of art, KD!!! Hats of to you, for your excellent writing!!! Keep up the good work! Be blessed, Clementine.

kdavidscott1

06/11/2009

Thank you Clementine for the comments - I have been very busy lately - I try to get on for a hot second to respond to mail and comments if nothing else - but one more important thing I must do is - piece you work in on the collabo' - I truly appreciate your efforts and time to represent on that - so it's a must (smile) - work is demanding - the movie project is calling for my attention - but so much for all the excuses... Much Love, KD

BLASTHEME commented on The Mistakes Of Mankind

06-09-2009

I definitely was feeling this one as it stands to be so true. Mankind is strategizing its own demise. I'm right there with you on this. GREAT TITLE/SUBJECT/& WRITE!!! 30+ STARZ Peace Bro BLAS

kdavidscott1

06/10/2009

This is actually a project kicked off by YungTeflon its what he calls picture poetry - he gave us that picture and asked us to write a poem relating to the picture he posted - that was my poem in response to the picture - thank you for the comment - he posted it in the forum - indigo did a haiku poem called Spark - I didn't know what that is but you know me I collaborated my talent with what she wrote and I posted it on my site it's titled Spark check it out... KD

tsgirl commented on The Mistakes Of Mankind

06-05-2009

Very good job, if you get this message, I want to know that I got all of yours and I tried to reply to your comments but I received them all in my box ,so if you get this one , I would like to Thank you so very kindly for taking the time to read my poems and to come back with positive criticism, it is my pleasure and I wellcome it, your work is nothing other than fantastic! and thank you for the info. on how to go and get your books.

kdavidscott1

06/10/2009

TSgirl thank you for the comment - I appreciate everything and thank God for blessing me with friends like you and a host of others I've met here - and I am glad my writings have been a blessing to you from God - I will continue to view your work as time allow and for the most part we are all good poets who always have room for criticism - which makes us strive and thrive for perfection - yet our work is still worthy of praise for the effort we put forth - so keep up the good work... Much Love, KD

kdavidscott1

06/15/2009

The book can be purchased at www.lulu.com/thebookcastle1 that is my book store front / my website - I would truly love your support tsgirl - it seem as though there is a lack of appreciation to the works in which I put forth - yet I will continue to do so - I know Satan / Devil / my inner beast hate the fact that I continuously bear fruit for Our Lord - but I am a branch from the tree of life which God has given me - so of course I bear fruit from the Creator...Amen KD

kdavidscott1

06/15/2009

Call me if you have a problem with your purchase... KD

skottae33 commented on The Mistakes Of Mankind

06-03-2009

u know what? the beautiful thing about poetry is the freedom it gives. whether rhyming or not it is your right to express yourself in any way with any writing style you prefer. it was wonderful ,thuoghtful,and so very true. keep on being the light on the hill . may God 4ever strenghthen you on your mission.

skottae33

06/03/2009

i meant to say thoughtful pardon me

kdavidscott1

06/03/2009

Thank you for your comment skottae33 - I love rhyming and timing things together when writing it takes careful planning and it makes for a beautiful flow...yes we all have our own styles - and I love and respect all artists and style... KD

suzzanna commented on The Mistakes Of Mankind

06-03-2009

i really like how this painted a very vivid picture despite the one above. it was like a story of how she got to where she was when the picture was taken. i liked this one a lot. just keep in mind that end rhymes can make a story lose focus because your trying your hardest to find a word to rhyme. it's very difficult to maintain and though i thought that you did a good job, some lines were a little hard to fathom as being part of the same poem. lines four and five are kind of out of place to me.

kdavidscott1

06/03/2009

This poem has a terminator effect where the poem speaks of mankind's efforts to replace humans with androids to produce without humanistic needs (sort of like Artificial Intelligence) but more intense - but their little project they did in the dark comes back to haunt them - this is what I tried to display in the poem... KD

kdavidscott1

06/03/2009

While at the same time displaying the message of what has happened to us today - automation on automobile lines and etc. has produced things at such a high output rate has left the market without need to produce anymore - we should've taken our time and kept mankind in the scheme of things instead of looking forward to machines doing everything for us KD

kdavidscott1

06/03/2009

This poem also explains that just because mankind dress things up to display a big picture to us - their picture starts to crumble and display the sinister plots and scams in which they create - putting us in terminated zones - a state of unemployment which has had a tremendous affect on people worldwide... KD Picture that when you look at the picture that is what I see... KD

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.