Life Locked Up

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    A peom i had to write, Coming from a nother persons point of veiw.

    Life Locked Up

    Im here miles away
    From my daughter who i hope
    one day ill see.

    People ask "How do you cope with
    being locked up for this long,
    Knowing your missing you on you
    Daughters life?"

    The only thing i know to say is
    "I try to stay strong and hope
    She does the same"

    Im filled with pain knowing i
    Still have years ahead till im free.
    I just hope my daughter and the
    people who ive left behind can see i didnt mean for this
    to happen.

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    spbsdude commented on Life Locked Up

    12-13-2010

    The anguish for the loss of your daughter comes through nicely here, but you could make it stronger. Don't hold back when you write, let the words and emotions run free even if it doesn't always make sense what you write, you can edit later. And I'm sorry you have been deprived of your daughter. I would feel lost without my children and grandchildren.

    AshleyyBabyy

    12/14/2010

    My father is the one in prison. In english class i had to write a poem from someones point of veiw, someone special to us. I chose my father whos been in prison since i was a baby and wont be out untill im atleast 24...

    Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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